Fangala the Flying Feline

Ooh, Bravo! Thank GOD; I finally found a short love poem with non-cliche imagery. I only have one suggestion. In the first line, change the comma to an elipses or ...

The dawn filters through the smog going up like last night's coffee went down heavy and bitter in the empty stomach. The black cat's paws are clotted with olive-green sludge ...

First off, let me say that this was very good. I look forward to reading more. But I do have a few comments for you, so here it goes: Her ...

When I went back to edit my novel, I found that the action the climax! I think it might be because of the numerous pitiful attempts at humor. Any advice ...

A thing about poetry: you don't need to end every line with a comma. In this case, it makes the poem halty and hard to read. I think you could ...

When I started reading this, I thought, "Oh, it's okay. Just another depressed poem." But then I read the line: "all looked away from her...--all but me." And my heart ...

This is really good. I think you should break it up into two stanzas. You have a good theme going, and you could easily make this poem longer. Also, the ...

OMG! You should publish a book of these! I think you've just started a fad of random haikus. Seriously, I love them. Write more.

Yes, I know exactly what you mean! Why couldn't Harry Potter die instead of Sirius Black?

Well, duh, isn't it obvious? Voldemort's going to explode after overdosing on U-No-Poo.

Chapter One My blood boiled. My heart tried to squeeze out between my ribs. My knuckles tightened on the branch until they were white as sheets. I wasn’t breathing. With ...

Let's face it. The only thing in Harry Potter that's worth reading is the part about U-No-Poo

Woohoo, a HP-hater forum! Actually, the first 4 books were pretty good, but I'm surprised I haven't burnt the Half-Blood Prince by now. I strongly dislike Ella Enchanted (the movie ...

I'm not good enough for heaven, I'm not bad enough for hell, and I might go somewhere in between, but Purgatory's full.

seeking honest reviews, please. I want to make this story as good as possible. Part of the Wilderness I am a cat. My color is black. I sleep in the ...